Descriptive writing is a description of characters, objects, environment in your story. It awakens the five senses: Sight, Sound, Smell, Taste, Touch.
Try using sensory descriptive words. Here’s an example from my upcoming story
VAGUE: I sat up in my dark bedroom. I felt horrible and angry. Eventually, I laid back down and started to cry.
VIVID: I sat up in my bed engulfed by the darkness, only the light from the moon illuminating the room. I felt a heavy pit in my stomach as I tried to grasp what just happened. Why do I keep allowing this happen? I wiped away a tear, angry at myself for crying. Get it together, I told myself. I laid back down in my bed, looking out the window, as the blaring sound of an ambulance whirled by. I stayed very still, trying not to feel anything, trying to be numb. If I moved my body or even one inch, I would come undone. I closed my eyes and could feel the hot tears running down my cheek and onto my pillow forming a warm puddle against my face.
See the difference? Ayana is expressing sadness because she feels heartbroken. But simply saying she felt horrible and angry wasn’t enough. Simply saying she was in a dark bedroom wasn’t enough. It’s important to paint the picture for your audience.
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